Is this an ok speaker bio?

Zach is a web evangelist, conference speaker, Google developers Melbourne organiser, CSS Expert and leader of Melbourne CSS. His mission is to make the web faster, more engaging, and easier to understand.
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Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
why do you talk about yourself in the third person ?
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
I think it's convention so that they can copy paste it into their platform
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
and I would put both the Melbourne related things next to one another
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
good idae
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
something like :
Zach is a web evangelist, CSS Expert, conference speaker, organizer at Google developers Melbourne, and leader of Melbourne CSS.
and the second sentence sounds off, for some reason
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
put CSS expert closer? ok
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
put what you are before what you do when describing yourself
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
He makes the web faster, more engaging, and easier to understand.
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
it's missing the sens of on going process like it's not something you are doing right now but will stop next week because you'll be done
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
He is making the web faster, more engaging, and easier to understand He's making the web faster, more engaging, and easier to understand.
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
Striving to make the web faster, more engaging and easier to understand.
"aiming to make" would work too but I feel like it's just that bit too much and that would sound too much like Kevin's intro XD
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
Working to make the web faster, more engaging and easier to understand sounds less buzzwordy to me, what do you think nvm I might just skip it First part is long enough for a short bio
Rägnar O'ock
Rägnar O'ock3mo ago
I'm not sure I would use "working" in that context, it's not incorrect but it doesn't convey the same vibe if that makes sense
Zach Jensz
Zach JenszOP3mo ago
yea

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