What do you guys think about this description of my account ?

Hey guys, so recently I´ve been recently struggling with writing a description for my IG account where I post military related stuff (as its said in description) so I wanted to ask you how should I edit it or what should I add to it 😄
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Underdog
Underdog16mo ago
I'm not gonna lie, not many people read channel descriptions unless they already like the content creator. On the side though, it looks good, but the last part "So I think you should follow me" sounds to passive, assert your opinion and give them reason to want to do what you say like "You should follow me, it helps a ton" sounding confident is something many people fail to do and it makes a huge difference